tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post6770933641603595686..comments2023-11-05T04:11:06.919-05:00Comments on Grey Places: Which One Would YOU Read???Artemis Greyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10849091563671031929noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post-13949692637224685252012-06-26T09:18:17.615-04:002012-06-26T09:18:17.615-04:00Hey, I just wanted to remind you that today I'...Hey, I just wanted to remind you that today I'm doing the query critiques. <a rel="nofollow">You can check out the details here. </a> Hope you join in!Daisy Carterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17735098333414333404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post-26442984277252846382012-06-23T20:14:59.259-04:002012-06-23T20:14:59.259-04:00I really like the excerpt from Gone Missing Girl a...I really like the excerpt from Gone Missing Girl a lot. It made me want to read more right away. I also had a sense of the narrator right off the bat, and even some of the conflict. Evernow is interesting and I do like it, but I have NO IDEA where it could be going. That's not a bad thing, but I just favor Gone Missing Girl more.Tara Goodyearhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05235300614438003465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post-19923546241169990502012-06-23T18:23:23.511-04:002012-06-23T18:23:23.511-04:00I liked the second one until you got to the period...I liked the second one until you got to the period part. That was too graphic for my taste. So, the first one.Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08603460393428782226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post-87619199750151923892012-06-23T09:59:26.791-04:002012-06-23T09:59:26.791-04:00I like both~ I would probably say Gone Missing Gir...I like both~ I would probably say Gone Missing Girl is the stronger entry, just because some agents (not necessarily Tricia~ I don't know about her tastes in YA) are shying away from dystopian.<br /><br />At the same time, I love the immediacy of Evernow~ I feel like I'm really in the scene with her, as opposed to Girl Gone Missing, where I feel like I'm reading a flashback (albeit, a very important flashback)--it cuts down on the tension in the following paragraphs the TINIEST bit, because you tell us right away that the thing in the shed is a girl.<br /><br />Just some food for thought~ again, I enjoyed reading them both (and being an outdoorsy girl, I appreciated the peeing outside bit~ and lamb's ear would definitely be an excellent wiping tool :)).<br /><br />Best of luck!Jesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14121018905141253640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post-55028737522701314662012-06-22T21:30:33.864-04:002012-06-22T21:30:33.864-04:00I like the Gone Missing Girl one, too. But that mi...I like the Gone Missing Girl one, too. But that might be because I write contemp and usually go for that over dystopian. These are both really interesting, though! Go with what feels right to you.Daisy Carterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17735098333414333404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post-13970327352506819382012-06-22T21:30:00.358-04:002012-06-22T21:30:00.358-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Daisy Carterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17735098333414333404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8114658220599872354.post-7583891307983318412012-06-22T16:26:24.439-04:002012-06-22T16:26:24.439-04:00I like the excerpt from Gone Missing Girl better. ...I like the excerpt from Gone Missing Girl better. But I'm no expert :)Cindyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12296605978050900171noreply@blogger.com